What are the most important things your parents taught you?
학생이 쓴 원문
There are many things my parents taught me. But if I have to choose only one, I would like to say these three things. First, My parents said you have to always smile. Smile is related to positive relationships with others. Additionally, Smiling makes me and others who looks me happy. I can get energy too. Second, My parents said love yourself. To love other people and for my happiness, love myself first. Who would love you if I don\'t love myself? It makes me high confidence. Third, You have to exercise steadily. It is important to keep my health. If I don\'t have healthy body, a lot of money and my job that I want to do is useless. That\'s because exercise is the most important in my life. These days, I am exercising three times a week. I think it is nice hobby than computer game and so on. Although there are many things my parents said, I remember these three things the most
강사 첨삭
Hi, Sally!
Thank you for sharing about this one.
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There are many things my parents taught me.
>> Correct!
But if I have to choose only one, I would like to say these three things.
>> Correct!
First, My parents said you have to always smile.
>> Correct!
Smile is related to positive relationships with others.
>> The smile is related to positive relationships with others.
Additionally, Smiling makes me and others who looks me happy.
>> Additionally, Smiling makes me and others look happy.
I can get energy too.
>> Correct!
Second, My parents said love yourself.
>> Correct!
To love other people and for my happiness, love myself first.
>> To love other people and for my happiness, I should love myself first.
Who would love you if I don\'t love myself?
>> Who would love me if I don\'t love myself?
It makes me high confidence.
>> It makes me boost my confidence.
Third, You have to exercise steadily.
>> Correct!
It is important to keep my health.
>> Correct!
If I don\'t have healthy body, a lot of money and my job that I want to do is useless.
>> If I don\'t have a healthy body, a lot of money and my job that I want to do is useless.
That\'s because exercise is the most important in my life.
>> Correct!
These days, I am exercising three times a week.
>> Correct!
I think it is nice hobby than computer game and so on.
>> I think it is a nice hobby than computer games and so on.
Although there are many things my parents said, I remember these three things the most.
>> Correct!
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