What are the most important things your parents taught you?

2018-04-23 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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My parents have already passed away but my memory on them is as vivid as yesterday, especially sometimes I still think about my mother. She passed away 5 years ago when she was 92 years old. She alway said her children including me to live frankly not to deceive others. I recognize after her death that her word was based on her religious belief. And also I repect my father, but unfortunately he passed away at the age of 65. He affected me in many ways of my life. He taught me to live hard and do your best for anything. He also told me to keep the faith to others. I deeply kept in mind his word of "the Faith", so I set up the word of "the Faith" as my family's motto.

강사 첨삭

Hi Dr. [이름]!

Thank you so much for your ideas!

I appreciate your answer for this question!

Have a great day and talk to you later!

Teacher ELLY.

ESSAY QUESTION:

What are the most important things your parents taught you?

My parents have already passed away but my memory on them is as vivid as yesterday,

>>My parents have already passed away but my memories of them is as vivid as yesterday.

 especially sometimes I still think about my mother.

>>Especially, there are times when I still think of my mother.

She passed away 5 years ago, when she was 92 years old.

CORRECT!

or>>She passed away at the age of 92, 5 years ago.

She alway said her children including me to live frankly not to deceive others.

>>She always told her children, including myself, to live honestly and not to deceive others.

I recognize after her death that her word was based on her religious belief.

>>I recognized after her death, that her words were based on her religious beliefs.

And also I repect my father, but unfortunately he passed away at the age of 65.

>> And also I respected my father, but unfortunately, he passed away at the age of 65.

He affected me in many ways of my life.

>>He affected my life in so many ways.

He taught me to live hard and do your best for anything.

>>He taught me to live hard and to do my best in everything.

He also told me to keep the faith to others.

>>He also told me to have faith in others.

I deeply kept in mind his word of \"the Faith\",

>>I kept his advice on “Faith” at heart.

so I set up the word of \"the Faith\" as my family\'s motto. 

>>So, I have set up his advice on \"Faith\" as my family\'s motto. 

 

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