What are the positive and negative effects of technology in the future?

2017-08-29 · 첨삭 강사 Sunday

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First of all, I will tell you about positive things of technology in the future. There are a lot of evidences that the 4th industrial revolution is coming from the mess media these days. As you know, the more developing of useful technology we can utilize, the more better life people enjoy enough. It makes our life more conveniently and becomes one of essential parts that needs to change in order to live more gratifying life as time goes by. However, negative effects are also occurred in the advantages. As improving automative productivities of factories It will be reducing work places that people could make a move. Besides, A.I could make a move all fields of service, emotion or more through technological methods when it comes to human’s area. Therefore we have to think about every details of technology and find wise solutions to overcome and avoid these negative effects.

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Teacher Sunday

First of all, I will tell you about positive things of technology in the future.
>> First, I will talk about positive effects of technology in the future.
There are a lot of evidences that the 4th industrial revolution is coming from the mess media these days.
>> There are a lot of evidences that the 4th industrial revolution is coming from the mass media these days.
As you know, the more developing of useful technology we can utilize, the more better life people enjoy enough.
>> As you know, the more development of useful technologies the more we can utilize, the better life people can enjoy.
It makes our life more conveniently and becomes one of essential parts that needs to change in order to live more gratifying life as time goes by.
>> It makes our lives more convenient and becomes one of the essential component that needs to change in order to live more gratifying life as time goes by.
However, negative effects are also occurred in the advantages.
>> However, negative effects are also present together with the advantages.
As improving automative productivities of factories It will be reducing work places that people could make a move.
>> As the automotive factories improves it\'s production it causes the reduction for the need of man power.
Besides, A.I could make a move all fields of service, emotion or more through technological methods when it comes to human’s area.
>> Besides, artificial intelligence could take care all fields of services, emotion or more through technological methods when it comes to human range.

Therefore we have to think about every details of technology and find wise solutions to overcome and avoid these negative effects.

>> Therefore, we have to know about every details of technology and find wise solutions to overcome and avoid these negative effects.

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