What are the possible causes for having a vice?
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Biting a nail is one of vices. But if it helps him calm down and focus on the important moment, it could be a cause of having a vice. Of course, He usually doesn\'t bite a nail. Only when he gets nervous or stresses out, he does his vice to relieve his stress.
There are more unconscious behavior to calm donw and help somebody to concentrate on his or her work such as pen spinning.
For me, pen spinning used to be one of my unconscious hehavior in my school days. I don\'t know where to learn this, and when to start this, but this behavior appeared involuntarily whenever I focused on somethiing. But not anymore.
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Hi, Steve! I\'m afraid your paragraph needs
better construction. Please work more on sentence construction.
- Debbie
>> Biting nails is one of the vices.
For me, pen spinning used to be one of my unconscious hehavior in my school days.
But if it helps him calm down and focus on the important moment, it could be a cause of having a vice.
>> If it helps someone calm down and focus on important things, it could be a problem. It could turn into a vice.
Of course, He usually doesn\'t bite a nail.
>> Of course, he doesn\'t usually bite his nails.
Only when he gets nervous or stresses out, he does his vice to relieve his stress.
>> He only does this when he gets nervous or stressed out to relieve his stress.
There are more unconscious behavior to calm donw and help somebody to concentrate on his or her work such as pen spinning.
There are more unconscious behavior to calm donw and help somebody to concentrate on his or her work such as pen spinning.
>> There are more unconscious behavior that makes somebody calm and help him/her concentrate on his/her work such as pen spinning.
For me, pen spinning used to be one of my unconscious hehavior in my school days.
>> I used to do it in my school days.
I don\'t know where to learn this, and when to start this, but this behavior appeared involuntarily whenever I focused on somethiing.
>> I don\'t know where I learned this and when I started this, but this behavior appeared whenever I focused on something.
But not anymore.
>> Fortunately, I don\'t do this anymore.
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