What are the possible causes for having a vice?
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Great composition, [이름] [이름]!
I definitely agree with your statement, the same as how the idiom says, \"Show me who your friends are and I\'ll tell you who you are.\"
Keep out of vices, [이름] [이름]!
Let\'s all be healthy.
See you in class.
~Teacher Eve.
I think it cause combined mental and surrounding environment
>> I think it\'s the cause of combined mental and surrounding environment.
The biggest problems of vice is not easy to fix
>> The biggest problems of vice are not easy to fix.
Because vice changed into habit and habit come from repetition behaviours
>> Because vice changed into a habit and a habit comes from a repetitive behavior.
And repetition behaviours come from that i mentioned at first time
>> And repetition behaviors comes from what I mentioned at first.
Even though their output vice is different each person by person, they have definitely encountered an unstable situation
>> Even though vices are different from each person, they definitely have encountered an unstable situation.
also although they think almost fix this vice, if who people having a vice meet familiar mental state or similar environment
>> Also, they may think that they have fixed their vice, if they meet people with vices or similar environment.
They come back again at first state to easily
>> They come back to their first state easily.
It’s to shortly called addiction
>> In short, it\'s called \"addiction\".
Moreover Addiction triggering nervousness and anxiousness
>> Moreover, addiction triggers nervousness and anxiousness.
All those thing exhausted life of who people having a vice
>> All those things have exhausted the life out of the people who have a vice.
The most bad things is making a vicious circle
>> The worst thing is having a vicious circle.
So if they dropped into the circle, that\'s Not easy to get out from the chaos
>> So if they dropped into the circle, it\'s not easy to get out.
Therefore, the most important thing is we must not making the any vice
>> Therefore, the most important thing is, we must stop having the vice.
So keep your mind, inner peace and keep control your surrounding environment
>> So keep your mind, have an inner peace and keep your surroundings in control.
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