What are the possible causes for having a vice?

2020-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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I think it cause combined mental and surrounding environment The biggest problems of vice is not easy to fix Because vice changed into habit and habit come from repetition behaviours And repetition behaviours come from that i mentioned at first time Even though their output vice is different each person by person, they have definitely encountered an unstable situation also although they think almost fix this vice, if who people having a vice meet familiar mental state or similar environment They come back again at first state to easily It’s to shortly called addiction Moreover Addiction triggering nervousness and anxiousness All those thing exhausted life of who people having a vice The most bad things is making a vicious circle So if they dropped into the circle, that\'s Not easy to get out from the chaos Therefore, the most important thing is we must not making the any vice So keep your mind, inner peace and keep control your surrounding environment

강사 첨삭

Happy Thursday!

Great composition, [이름] [이름]!

I definitely agree with your statement, the same as how the idiom says, \"Show me who your friends are and I\'ll tell you who you are.\"

Keep out of vices, [이름] [이름]!

Let\'s all be healthy.

See you in class.

~Teacher Eve.

I think it cause combined mental and surrounding environment

>> I think it\'s the cause of combined mental and surrounding environment.
 The biggest problems of vice is not easy to fix

>> The biggest problems of vice are not easy to fix.
 Because vice changed into habit and habit come from repetition behaviours

>> Because vice changed into a habit and a habit comes from a repetitive behavior.
 And repetition behaviours come from that i mentioned at first time

>>  And repetition behaviors comes from what I mentioned at first.
 Even though their output vice is different each person by person, they have definitely encountered an unstable situation

>>  Even though vices are different from each person, they definitely have encountered an unstable situation.
 also although they think almost fix this vice, if who people having a vice meet familiar mental state or similar environment

>> Also, they may think that they have fixed their vice, if they meet people with vices or similar environment.
 They come back again at first state to easily

>> They come back to their first state easily.
 It’s to shortly called addiction

>> In short, it\'s called \"addiction\".
 Moreover Addiction triggering nervousness and anxiousness

>> Moreover, addiction triggers nervousness and anxiousness.
 All those thing exhausted life of who people having a vice

>> All those things have exhausted the life out of the people who have a vice.
 The most bad things is making a vicious circle

>> The worst thing is having a vicious circle.
 So if they dropped into the circle, that\'s Not easy to get out from the chaos

>> So if they dropped into the circle, it\'s not easy to get out.
 Therefore, the most important thing is we must not making the any vice

>> Therefore, the most important thing is, we must stop having the vice.
 So keep your mind, inner peace and keep control your surrounding environment

>> So keep your mind, have an inner peace and keep your surroundings in control. 

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