What are the possible reasons that push some to give up on something or someone?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think there are a variety of reasons why people give up on something or someone. Many people set their own goals to achieve dreams and keep motivated. However, there are some factors which disturb people\'s goals, such as financial limitation or insufficient time. When it comes to relationship, people expect relationship to be optimistic. However, as time goes on, people face reality. For instance, maintaining relationship sometimes entails emotional exhausting. Since each person has a different personality, developing relationship requires endurance and might cause conflicts and even drifting apart.
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You explained well that financial limits, time, and emotional exhaustion can push people to give up. Well done!
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~ Trixia
CONTENTT:
I think there are a variety of reasons why people give up on something or someone.
~CORRECT.
Many people set their own goals to achieve dreams and keep motivated.
~ CORRECT.
However, there are some factors which disturb people\'s goals, such as financial limitation or insufficient time.
~ However, there are some factors that disturb people’s goals, such as financial limitations or insufficient time.
When it comes to relationship, people expect relationship to be optimistic.
~ When it comes to relationships, people expect them to be optimistic.
However, as time goes on, people face reality.
~ CORRECT.
For instance, maintaining relationship sometimes entails emotional exhausting.
~ For instance, maintaining relationships sometimes entails emotional exhaustion.
Since each person has a different personality, developing relationship requires endurance and might cause conflicts and even drifting apart.
~ Since each person has a different personality, developing relationships requires endurance and might cause conflicts or even drifting apart.
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