What are the thing you should achieve 10 years from now?

2017-04-17 · 첨삭 강사 Travis

학생이 쓴 원문

Actually I never have been thinking about my future after 10 years. When I was a elementary school I thought that Can I would be a high school student? Amazingly, I could be a high school student and I got a test at the end of the year for entering into a university that I didn’t want to go. As time goes by I'll be getting older while working at my company or another place. I have determine that I should go to travel abroad more than twice a year so I bought a map which can be scratched. Whenever I visited some country, I can scratch a specific part which is pointed on the map. then the part that I scratched changes to different color! I will go more than 70 countries until 10 years past. and I will collect a lot of post cards which are expressed to characteristic of the country that I visited. especially, Salar de uyuni which is located in Bolivia. I would be a wonderful traveler!

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!


Thank you for answering your homework. I\'m glad that your dream is so wonderful. I hope you will reach your dreams as soon as possible. See you in our class. :)


Teacher Travis.

 

Actually I never have been thinking about my future after 10 years.
>>Correct.

>>OR: I actually never been thinking about my future after 10 years.
 When I was a elementary school I thought that Can I would be a high school student?
>>When I was an elementary student, I thought that if I would be a high school student?
Amazingly, I could be a high school student and I got a test at the end of the year for entering into a university that I didn’t want to go.
>>Amazingly, I became a high school student and I got
an entrance exam in the end of the year for entering into a university that I didn’t want to enter.
As time goes by I\'ll be getting older while working at my company or another place.
>>Correct.
>>OR: As the time goes by, I\'ll get older while working at my company or another place.
I have determine that I should go to travel abroad more than twice a year so I bought a map which can be scratched.
>>I determined that I should go travel abroad more that twice a year so I bought a map which can be scratched.
Whenever I visited some country, I can scratch a specific part which is pointed on the map.
>>When I visited some countries, I scratch the specific part which is pointed on the map.
then the part that I scratched changes to different color!
>>Then the part that I scratched will change to a different color!
I will go more than 70 countries until 10 years past.
>>I will go to more that 70 countries within 10 years from now.
and I will collect a lot of post cards which are expressed to characteristic of the country that I visited. especially, Salar de uyuni which is located in Bolivia.
>>Correct.
 I would be a wonderful traveler!

>>Correct.

>>OR: I will be a wonderful traveler!

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