What are the things kids your age worry about.
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I things kids my age worry about join the army because they think army leaders arebvery bad and scary.
But I think army is scary and amazing.
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What are the things kids your age worry about?
I things kids my age worry about join the army because they think army leaders arebvery bad and scary.
>> The things that kids my age worry about are joining the army because they think army leaders are very bad and scary.
But I think army is scary and amazing.
>> But I think although the army is scary, it\'s amazing.
>> OR: However, I think the army is scary but amazing.
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