What are the things that contributes to worsening relationships in the society?
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Hello there! I agree that people can be selfish at time and can see themselves higher than others. The western people tend to think they\'re better than others because of their economic standing. People should think of the betterment of others too and not just their selves. Anyways, I\'ve spotted some mistakes in your spelling, and an incorrect use of apostrophe s (\'s). Apostrophes are used to indicate possession. For example, That bag\'s mine. We also have to polish your grammar. Nothing serious that we can\'t work on Thank you for sending in your composition! Take care
I think something that contributes to worsening realationship in the society is not only disfuntional family but people\'s selfishness.
>> I think the things that contribute to the worsening relationship in the society are not only a dysfunctional family but other people\'s selfishness as well.
I think people\'s selfishness is most big problem.
>> I think that people\'s selfishness is the biggest problem.
Most people think \'human is the best\' and don\'t think relationship with a around people and environment.
>> Most people think that \"Humans are the best\" but they don\'t think about their relationship with other people and the environment.
poeple can\'t exsist only one.
>> People can\'t live alone.
OR
>> No one can live all by himself/herself.
All the things are related with someone and somthing.
>> All things are related to someone or something.
OR
>> All things are connected to each other.
It is a east poeple\'s thinking way.
>> It is the way eastern people think.
OR
>> It\'s the way easterners think.
It is so diffrence with the west people\'s way of the thinking that human are the best in the environment.
>> It\'s so different with the western people\'s way of thinking that humans are the best.
I don\'t say west people\'s thinking way is bad.
>>I\'m not saying that the way western people think is bad.
It\'s a some diffrence way\'s of thinking but it effect the selfishness of human.
>> It\'s a different way of thinking and the effect is selfishness of people.
So for our good society, we have to think and thanks for the environmaent and relation
>> So for the betterment of our society, we have to think of other people and thank them.
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