What are the things you need when you go on a trip?

2022-07-04 · 첨삭 강사 Maine

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When I go on a trip I must have bring my cell phone. It is very basic and necessary thing everyone. I can check my hotel and tour reservation. And I have to contact with my guide. When I was go to Malaysia.in first day. My phone was exploded while I\'m charging. Because the power didn\'t match. I think the converter was defective. So from the next day. I used my friend phone. I\'m glad I wasn\'t along. We used just one phone during trip. I knew it before, but I realized that cell phone is very essential and indispensable. Cell phone can be a camera. Nowadays, iPhone and Galaxy have professional camera models.it was not need to another camera. And it can be wallet. I can pay for my cell phone. Like PAYCO or internet banking services. I think I can travel anywhere with just one cell phone Oh!. and we need to power band for charged we\'recell phone.

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Hello [이름] [이름]!
There are many things you can bring when traveling.  Remember to list what you need to bring so you won\'t forget any of them. :)


~T. Maine


When I go on a trip I must have bring my cell phone.
>>When I go on a trip, I must bring my cellphone. 
It is very basic and necessary thing everyone.
>>It is a very basic and necessary thing for everyone. 
I can check my hotel and tour reservation. 
>>Correct. 
And I have to contact with my guide. 
>>And I also need to contact my tour guide. 
When I was go to Malaysia.in first day. My phone was exploded while I\'m charging.
>>When I went to Malaysia on my first day, my phone exploded while I was charging. 
Because the power didn\'t match. I think the converter was defective. 
>> It was because the power outlet didn\'t match my phone\'s voltage and I think the converter was defective. 
So from the next day. I used my friend phone. 
>>So the next day, I used my friend\'s phone. 
I\'m glad I wasn\'t along. 
>>I\'m glad it wasn\'t that long. 
We used just one phone during trip. 
>> We used one phone for the whole trip. 
I knew it before, but I realized that cell phone is very essential and indispensable.
>>I knew it before, but I realized that the cellphone was very essential and indispensable
Cell phone can be a camera. 
>>Cellphones can be used as a camera. 
Nowadays, iPhone and Galaxy have professional camera models.
>>Correct. 
it was not need to another camera.
>>It was no need to bring another camera. 
And it can be wallet. 
>>It could also be your wallet. 
I can pay for my cell phone. Like PAYCO or internet banking services. 
>> I can pay anything using my cellphone just like PAYCO or internet banking services. 
I think I can travel anywhere with just one cell phone
>>I think I can travel anywhere with just one cellphone. 
Oh!. and we need to power band for charged we\'recell phone.
>>Oh! In addition, we also need a power bank in case we need to charge our phone while traveling. 

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