What are the things you\'re going to do when you retire?
학생이 쓴 원문
When I retire my job, I think I will be trying to have a time with my family.
Until I retire, I think It will be too difficult to have a time with my family very well because a lot of work to do. But as I already told you, I think balancing between work and life is the most important. So I will be trying to balance both of them during my life.
And I think I will make a plan to live differently compared with before life. Recording great advice to our children, challenging new things of field or etc. Before I do that, we should not be burden to our children so I have to save lots of money.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! :)
Retirement is what you make it. If you’re sitting and wondering what to do when retired and bored, it may be a relief to know that there are plenty of options out there and yours is actually a good suggestion. :)
Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.
When I retire my job, I think I will be trying to have a time with my family.
>> When I retire from my job, I think I will be trying spend time with my family.
Until I retire, I think It will be too difficult to have a time with my family very well because a lot of work to do.
>> Until I retire, I think It will be too difficult to have time for my family very because of all the work that I do.
But as I already told you, I think balancing between work and life is the most important.
>> But as I already told you, I think balancing work and life is very important.
So I will be trying to balance both of them during my life.
>> So I will be trying to balance both of them in my life.
And I think I will make a plan to live differently compared with before life.
>> I think I will make a plan to live differently compared to before.
Recording great advice to our children, challenging new things of field or etc.
>> I will record great advice to our children, do new challenging things and many more.
Before I do that, we should not be burden to our children so I have to save lots of money.
>> CORRECT
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.