What are the things you\'re going to do when you retire?

2021-10-15 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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If possible, I want to work for a long time without retirement. But if I have to retire, I want to travel the world with my husband. I want to use the English I learned fluently when traveling abroad. And then, I want to buy a house in Jeju Island and live with my husband.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jennifer:)

Retirement is what you make it. If you’re sitting and wondering what to do when retired and bored, it may be a relief to know that there are plenty of options out there and yours is actually a good suggestion. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If possible, I want to work for a long time without retirement.
>> CORRECT

But if I have to retire, I want to travel the world with my husband.
>> CORRECT

I want to use the English I learned fluently when traveling abroad.
>> I want to use the English that I learned fluently when I travel abroad. 

And then, I want to buy a house in Jeju Island and live with my husband.
>> And then, I want to buy a house in Jeju Island and live with my husband there. 

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