What are the three most important things for you to be happy?

2022-11-10 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

학생이 쓴 원문

They are my family, friends, and exercising. First, I need my family because I need to be comfortable with my family, and I don\'t want to be lonely. Second, I need my friends to hang out with to be happy. And for the last, I need exercising because I love to exercise. Because of these reasons, my family, friends and exercising are the most important things for my happiness.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!
Thanks for being consistent with your writing. See you tomorrow! ^^
~`Teacher Kate 
  
They are my family, friends, and exercising.
>>CORRECT!
First, I need my family because I need to be comfortable with my family, and I don\'t want to be lonely.
>>First, I need my family because I am comfortable with them, and I don\'t want to be lonely.
Second, I need my friends to hang out with to be happy.
>>CORRECT!
And for the last, I need exercising because I love to exercise.
>>And lastly, I need exercising because I love to exercise.
Because of these reasons, my family, friends and exercising are the most important things for my happiness.
>>CORRECT!

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