What are the transportation needs of your country?
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Public transportation is well established in Seoul and around capital city but transportation in country side is poor. Most companies are located in Seoul, so people would like to live as close as their company. As a result, our government has put the effort to make various transportation. We didn\'t have a express train 15 years ago But it has been started to run since 2004 and then people can commute from Seoul to Busan city which is the southeast part in Korea in one day. I don\'t think that country side needs more transportation because there are few people to use pubic transportation. However, people living in metropolitan area should use public transportation instead of using their own car. We know that vehicle exhaust emissions cause a micro dust, so we must try to keep our country and earth by taking public transportation.
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Thanks for sharing [이름]! Micro dust is around. In the Philippines, there are a lot of motorcycles.
Train and subways are not common. Transportation in Korea is more improved and more developed than here. ^^
~~Teacher May~~
Public transportation is well established in Seoul and around capital city but transportation in country side is poor.>> Public transportation is well-established in Seoul and around the capital city but transportation in the countryside is poor.
Most companies are located in Seoul, so people would like to live as close as their company.
>> Most companies are located in Seoul, so people prefer to live closer to their company.
As a result, our government has put the effort to make various transportation.
>> As a result, our government has to put an effort to make more public transports.
We didn\'t have a express train 15 years ago But it has been started to run since 2004 and then people can commute from Seoul to Busan city which is the southeast part in Korea in one day.
>> We didn\'t have an express train 15 years ago but it started to run since 2004 so that people can commute from Seoul to Busan, which is the southeastern part in Korea, in one day.
I don\'t think that country side needs more transportation because there are few people to use pubic transportation.
>> I don\'t think that countrysides need more transportation because there are few people who will use it.
However, people living in metropolitan area should use public transportation instead of using their own car.
We know that vehicle exhaust emissions cause a micro dust, so we must try to keep our country and earth by taking public transportation.
>> CORRECT
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