What are the unexpected experiences you encountered on one of your trips abroad
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Last year my wife and I visited Croatia for summer vacation. We rented a car at the first city and traveled many famous cities. At the last day of trip we had some time before flight departure. So we went to a small town which is not popular to visitors. There was a small peaceful beach and also a small cafe nearby. After having a coffee there, we got back to the car, and I found a wheel had been flatted. We were shocked because it was small town so that we couldn\'t find a mechanic even worse, we didn\'t have much time too.I decided to drive the car to the airport. I knew it was dangerous but we didn\'t have any other choice. Thankfully we arrived the airport before departure. l got sweat all my back when I approach to there. The owner gaved us extra charges but we didn\'t care. Anyway It was very difficult time for me and my wife. But eventually that town and the beach was the most memorable city among many cities. If the tire hadn\'t been flatted, we wouldn\'t have remembered that place.
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Hello George,
Thank you so much for taking time to answer this simple question. I really appreciate the way you answer it. You exceeded my expectation. Keep on improving your sentences.
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie
What are the unexpected experiences you encountered on one of your trips abroad?
Last year my wife and I visited Croatia for summer vacation.
>>> CORRECT
We rented a car at the first city and traveled many famous cities.
>>> We rented a car on the first city and went strolling on famous places around the area.
At the last day of trip we had some time before flight departure.
>>> On the last day of our trip, we had enough time before our flight back.
So we went to a small town which is not popular to visitors.
>>> CORRECT
OR: So we went to a small town which is not that famous to visitors.
There was a small peaceful beach and also a small cafe nearby.
>>> There was a small peaceful beach along the area and a small cafe is also nearby.
After having a coffee there, we got back to the car, and I found a wheel had been flatted.
>>> After sipping our coffee, we decided to go back to the car but suddenly, I found that the tires were flat and that means we cannot drive back.
We were shocked because it was small town so that we couldn\'t find a mechanic even worse, we didn\'t have much time too.
>>> We were worried because we couldn\'t find a mechanic and the worst is that we need to catch our flight back. We don\'t have much time to wait for a mechanic.
I decided to drive the car to the airport. I knew it was dangerous but we didn\'t have any other choice.
>>> CORRECT
Thankfully we arrived the airport before departure.
>>>Thankfully,we arrived in the airport before the departure of our flight.
l got sweat all my back when I approach to there.
>>> I was so wet with sweat all over by body when we approached in the airport.
The owner gaved us extra charges but we didn\'t care.
>>> The owner of the car gave us extra charges for the flat tires but we didn\'t really mind paying for the extra charge.
Anyway It was very difficult time for me and my wife.
>>> Anyways, that was the most difficult time for my wife and I.
But eventually that town and the beach was the most memorable city among many cities.
>>> But behind that sudden experience, the small town and the beautiful beach was the most memorable place among the places we\'ve been to.
If the tire hadn\'t been flatted, we wouldn\'t have remembered that place.
>>> If the tires wouldn\'t been flat then we wouldhave better memories with that place.
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