What are three skills or traits you wish you had (that are useful for your work)?

2021-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

The first skill is to improve my understanding of financial products. Even though my major was international finance, I concentrated most of my studies on banking structure. After graduating from the university, I took some online courses in the prestigious institute to fill the gap in my knowledge, and now I would like more practical experience. The second skill is more understanding of the technology software. I worked in the data-driven environment, but it was limited to providing clients\' solutions based on data analysis. I would like to proceed more as a data analyst to consolidate and visualize the datasets. Finally, I would like to develop charisms and learn to say no to customers\' demands. Concentrating too much on increasing customer presence allowed me to increase revenue to 50%, I barely reject customer demand even when tasks go beyond my work scope. Accordingly, I would like to learn how to reject politely to customers.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for this Aciel!

The first skill is to improve my understanding of financial products. 
>>>  correct  
>>> OR: The first skill is to improve my understanding on financial products.   
Even though my major was international finance, I concentrated most of my studies on banking structure. 
>>> correct  
After graduating from the university, I took some online courses in the prestigious institute to fill the gap in my knowledge, and now I would like more practical experience. 
>>> correct    
The second skill is more understanding of the technology software. 
>>> correct  
>>> OR: The second skill is more understanding on the technology software.  
I worked in the data-driven environment, but it was limited to providing clients\' solutions based on data analysis. 
>>>  correct   
I would like to proceed more as a data analyst to consolidate and visualize the datasets. 
>>>  correct   
Finally, I would like to develop charisms and learn to say no to customers\' demands. 
>>> Finally, I would like to develop charisma and learn to say no to customers\' demands.  
Concentrating too much on increasing customer presence allowed me to increase revenue to 50%, I barely reject customer demand even when tasks go beyond my work scope. 
>>> correct   
Accordingly, I would like to learn how to reject politely to customers.
>>> correct  
>>> OR:  Accordingly, I would like to learn how to reject  customers politely.

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