What are three things you want to purchase for yourself?
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First, I want to buy a MacBook. It is a laptop made by Apple. I love Apple products. I am a software engineer who mainly works on Windows. Actually, I don\'t really need a MacBook for work, but I want to have it.
Second, I want to have a SUV. As I told you before, I bought my car fifteen years old. I want to have a new car. The one I have now is a sedan. I have two children, and they are getting bigger and bigger. SUV also is trending.
Third, I want to get a drone. Before flying a drone, I should get a license. If I have one, I will travel to many places to take pictures.
Can you imagine what my plan is? I will travel many places in my SUV to take pictures by the drone, and then I will edit them on my MacBook.
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To be a good shopper, prioritize information, budgeting, and comparing possibilities. Before making a purchase, you should first analyze your needs, research items, and compare pricing. Being a savvy buyer entails thinking about the long-term worth of your purchases and avoiding impulse purchases.
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First, I want to buy a MacBook. It is a laptop made by Apple. I love Apple products. I am a software engineer who mainly works on Windows. Actually, I don\'t really need a MacBook for work, but I want to have it.
>>> CORRECT
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: First, I\'d like to acquire a MacBook. It\'s an Apple laptop. I enjoy Apple products. I am a software engineer who primarily works with Windows. Actually, I don\'t actually need a MacBook for business, but I would want to have one.
Second, I want to have a SUV. As I told you before, I bought my car fifteen years old. I want to have a new car. The one I have now is a sedan. I have two children, and they are getting bigger and bigger. SUV also is trending.
>>> Second, I want to have an SUV. As I told you before, I bought my car fifteen years ago. I want to have a new car. The one I have now is a sedan. I have two children, and they are getting bigger and bigger. SUV is the trend now.
>>> OR: Second, I want to own an SUV. As I already stated, I acquired my car fifteen years ago. I want to get a new car. I currently have a sedan. I have two children, and they are becoming bigger. SUVs are the current trend.
Third, I want to get a drone. Before flying a drone, I should get a license. If I have one, I will travel to many places to take pictures.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: Third, I want to get a drone. Before I operate a drone, I should obtain a license. If I have one, I plan to travel to various locations to snap photographs.
Can you imagine what my plan is? I will travel many places in my SUV to take pictures by the drone, and then I will edit them on my MacBook.
>>> Can you imagine what my plan is? I will travel to many places in my SUV to take pictures by drone, and then I will edit them on my MacBook.
>>> OR: Can you figure out what my plan is? I\'ll drive around in my SUV and shoot drone photos, which I\'ll then edit on my MacBook.
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