What are three wishes you have for your life?
학생이 쓴 원문
I have many wishes in my life because I am a dreamer. Nowadays, among them, the most three wishes are visiting Korea, adapting to the United States and getting the job again. Actually, I have had a plan to visit my parents in Korea. So I bought the ticket 1 month ago when the coronavirus didn\'t appear in the United States. I have excited to meet my parents since buying it. But the coronavirus has spread severely for 2 weeks so that I can\'t confirm to go to Korea. My parents look so sad waiting for me every day. Moreover, I have been delayed to adapt to the new life in the United States because of the coronavirus. My English was closed and I am not any chances to talk with friends in English. I am so old, so I want to go to school or get a job quickly. Therefore, I would like to learn English and American culture as soon as possible. But now I have always been being at home for about 2 weeks. I wish I will meet my parents and prepare my new life soon.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! Thank you for doing your first homework.
Great job in constructing long sentences.
Keep it up!
- T. Rina ^^
1. I have many wishes in my life because I am a dreamer.
>> CORRECT!
2. Nowadays, among them, the most three wishes are visiting Korea, adapting to the United States and getting the job again.
>> CORRECT!
3. Actually, I have had a plan to visit my parents in Korea.
>> CORRECT!
4. So I bought the ticket 1 month ago when the coronavirus didn\'t appear in the United States.
>> CORRECT!
5. I have excited to meet my parents since buying it.
>> I have been excited to meet my parents since buying it.
6. But the coronavirus has spread severely for 2 weeks so that I can\'t confirm to go to Korea.
>> But the coronavirus has spread severely for 2 weeks that\'s why I can\'t go back to Korea.
7. My parents look so sad waiting for me every day.
>> CORRECT!
8. Moreover, I have been delayed to adapt to the new life in the United States because of the coronavirus.
>> Moreover, adapting to the new life in the United States has been delayed because of coronavirus.
9. My English was closed and I am not any chances to talk with friends in English.
>> I am not that fluent in English so I don\'t have much chances to talk with my friends in English.
10. I am so old, so I want to go to school or get a job quickly.
>> CORRECT!
11. Therefore, I would like to learn English and American culture as soon as possible.
>> CORRECT!
OR: Therefore, I would like to learn English and be familiar with American culture as soon as possible.
12. But now I have always been being at home for about 2 weeks.
>> But now, I have always been staying at home for about 2 weeks.
13. I wish I will meet my parents and prepare my new life soon.
>> I wish I will meet my parents and prepare for my new life soon.
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