What are you most afraid of? Why?

2018-09-04 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

I'm afraid of being in the high place. I have an acrophopia. I found that symptom when I was 15 years old. Until 15 years old, I liked to go on the rides in the amusement park. I used to enjoy the thrills. But it was my school field trip to the amusement park when I get an acrophobia. I enjoyed the rides as usual with my friends. But Riding on the one ride and going up in the air, I felt my seat belt unfastend. I was so scary at that time that I counldn't speak out and scream. I was just embarrased. I was safe fortunately, but after that moment, I can't go on the rides and go high as of today.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Sian! ^_^

Thank you very much for writing an essay about your biggest fear.

I think you\'re a brave person because a lot of people out there are scared of admitting what they are truly afraid of.

I am scared of heights too.

I discovered it when I was out in a community service in my college days.

We had to cross a hanging bridge which was about 200 meters long and 150 meters high.

Looking down made me feel dizzy and to make the matter worse, it was really windy because of an incoming typhoon.

By the time we finished crossing the hanging bridge, I was white as paper and I threw up.

It was a terrible experience.

I tried to fight my fear my climbing mountains.

It was difficult but I think I conquered it somehow.

I hope you get to conquer yours someday.

See you in class later.

~Teacher Charry :)

I\'m afraid of being in the high place.

>> CORRECT!

I have an acrophopia.

>> I have (an) acrophobia.

I found that symptom when I was 15 years old.

>> CORRECT!

Until 15 years old, I liked to go on the rides in the amusement park.

>> Until 15 years old, I liked to go on the rides at the amusement park.

I used to enjoy the thrills.

>> CORRECT!

But it was my school field trip to the amusement park when I get an acrophobia.

>> CORRECT!

I enjoyed the rides as usual with my friends.

>> CORRECT!

But Riding on the one ride and going up in the air, I felt my seat belt unfastend.

>> But while riding an amusement ride and going up in the air, I felt my seat belt unfastened.

I was so scary at that time that I counldn\'t speak out and scream.

>> I was so scared at that time that I counldn\'t speak out and scream.

I was just embarrased.

>> I was just embarrassed.

I was safe fortunately, but after that moment, I can\'t go on the rides and go high as of today.

>> I was safe fortunately, but after that moment, I can\'t go on the rides and go high anymore.

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