What are you thankful for this year?

2019-09-16 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

학생이 쓴 원문

I have one son and a daughter. My son entered the elementary school this year. My wife and I was really worried if he could adapt well in the new environment. He is shy, inactive and introverted. That is why I was worried about my son\'s school life. However, my son has made quite a lot of friends. Furthermore, he participated all programs at school actively. He went to school with my mother in law three months ago, but he can go to school by himself without any guardian these days. Our family lived in the UAE for 3 years. At that time my son attended the nursery which had a English curriculum. He even couldn\'t speak English and couldn\'t understand what teachers said. As I explained above, he has a introverted personality and has a problem to make friends. So, He was suffering with adapting a new environment. I guess that his personality have been changed since he came back to Korea from the UAE. I appreciate that my son adapted the school very well than I expected.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^^


Well I\'m glad to hear that your son has adjusted well to the school.

I know this is a very delicate time for both you and the kids.

But it\'ll be alright. ^^

Thank you for sharing this with me!

See you again soon.


~t. Ally



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I have one son and a daughter.

>> I have a son and a daughter.


My son entered the elementary school this year.

>> CORRECT!


My wife and I was really worried if he could adapt well in the new environment.

>> My wife and I were really worried if he would be able to adapt well in his new environment.


He is shy, inactive and introverted.

>> CORRECT!


That is why I was worried about my son\'s school life. 

>> CORRECT!


 However, my son has made quite a lot of friends.

>> CORRECT!


 Furthermore, he participated all programs at school actively.

>> Furthermore, he participated in all programs at school actively.


He went to school with my mother-in-law three months ago, but he can go to school by himself without any guardian these days.

>> CORRECT!


Our family lived in the UAE for 3 years.

>> CORRECT!


At that time my son attended the nursery which had a English curriculum.

>> At that time, my son attended a nursery which had an English curriculum.


He even couldn\'t speak English and couldn\'t understand what teachers said.

>> He couldn\'t even speak English and couldn\'t understand what his teachers said.


As I explained above, he has a introverted personality and has a problem to make friends.

>> As I explained above, he has an introverted personality and has a problem to make friends.


So, He was suffering with adapting a new environment.

>> So, He was suffering with adapting to a new environment.


I guess that his personality have been changed since he came back to Korea from the UAE.

>> I guess that his personality has been changed since he came back to Korea from the UAE.


I appreciate that my son adapted the school very well than I expected.

>> I appreciate that my son has adapted to the school better than I expected.

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