What are your favorite outdoor activities on week ends? Explain why you love these activities?

2014-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Anna

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My favorite outdoor activity on week ends is go out for a walk with my dog, my girlfriend and her dog. My dog is 2 years old, her dog is 6 years old. From my dog was young, they have stayed together untill a year ago. So they became best friend each other. When they meet together, they are extremely delighted. So I sould let them meet together for their happiness. Thus it's became my favorite outdoor activity. And I also like to go to some place that has a good view, take a walk, take a picture, find a good restaurant and eat delicious food. I regard building up good memories as important. So I try to do something with my girlfriend as much as I could.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! A wonderful day to you!^^ Thank you for your essay. You have an interesting outdoor activity. I also have a dog, named Sachi. I love to play with her during my free time.   Have fun and see you! T. Anna.(^.^)   My favorite outdoor activity on week ends is go out for a walk with my dog, my girlfriend and her dog. >> My favorite outdoor activiy is going out for a walk with my girlfriend and our dogs. My dog is 2 years old, her dog is 6 years old. >> Correct  From my dog was young, they have stayed together untill a year ago. >> When my dog is still young, she/he lives with my girlfriend\'s dog a year ago. So they became best friend each other. >> So they became best friends. When they meet together, they are extremely delighted. >> When they see each other, they are extremely delighted. So I sould let them meet together for their happiness. >> So I should let them see each other often for their happiness.  Thus it\'s became my favorite outdoor activity. >> Thus, it became my favorite outdoor activity.And I also like to go to some place that has a good view, take a walk, take a picture, find a good restaurant and eat delicious food. >> Almost correct >> You just need to add \'S\' to the word \'places\' I regard building up good memories as important. >> I want to build good memories. >> You mean to say: Good memories are important? So I try to do something with my girlfriend as much as I could. >> So I am trying to do some important things or memories with my girlfriend, as much as I could.

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