What are your favorite outdoor activities on week ends? Explain why you love these activities?
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My favorite outdoor activity on week ends is go out for a walk with my dog, my girlfriend and her dog. My dog is 2 years old, her dog is 6 years old. From my dog was young, they have stayed together untill a year ago. So they became best friend each other. When they meet together, they are extremely delighted. So I sould let them meet together for their happiness. Thus it's became my favorite outdoor activity.
And I also like to go to some place that has a good view, take a walk, take a picture, find a good restaurant and eat delicious food. I regard building up good memories as important. So I try to do something with my girlfriend as much as I could.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]!
A wonderful day to you!^^
Thank you for your essay.
You have an interesting outdoor activity. I also have a dog, named Sachi.
I love to play with her during my free time.
Have fun and see you!
T. Anna.(^.^)
My favorite outdoor activity on week ends is go out for a walk with my dog, my girlfriend and her dog.
>> My favorite outdoor activiy is going out for a walk with my girlfriend and our dogs.
My dog is 2 years old, her dog is 6 years old.
>> Correct
From my dog was young, they have stayed together untill a year ago.
>> When my dog is still young, she/he lives with my girlfriend\'s dog a year ago.
So they became best friend each other.
>> So they became best friends.
When they meet together, they are extremely delighted.
>> When they see each other, they are extremely delighted.
So I sould let them meet together for their happiness.
>> So I should let them see each other often for their happiness.
Thus it\'s became my favorite outdoor activity.
>> Thus, it became my favorite outdoor activity.And I also like to go to some place that has a good view, take a walk, take a picture, find a good restaurant and eat delicious food.
>> Almost correct
>> You just need to add \'S\' to the word \'places\'
I regard building up good memories as important.
>> I want to build good memories.
>> You mean to say: Good memories are important?
So I try to do something with my girlfriend as much as I could.
>> So I am trying to do some important things or memories with my girlfriend, as much as I could.
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