What are your happiest hometown memories?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my hometown, there used to be an small amusement park.
Since I was very young, I visited the amusement park with my parents and took many pictures.
Even when I remember, I took delicious things with my parents in the car, spread out a mat, sat down, ate, and rode a children\'s roller coaster etc. I remember having fun taking pictures with my family.
The amusement park has been a picnic area for my family for a few years even after my brother was born, and has disappeared as fewer people visit.
But it remains a happy memory for my family.
강사 첨삭
Hi,
Thank you for sharing your answer with me. It was nice to know about your happiest hometown memory. This kind of memory is one of those we could treasure forever. ^^
~ Teacher Gina
In my hometown, there used to be an small amusement park.
>> In my hometown, there used to be a small amusement park.
Since I was very young, I visited the amusement park with my parents and took many pictures.
>> When I was very young, I used to visit the amusement park with my parents and take many pictures.
Even when I remember, I took delicious things with my parents in the car, spread out a mat, sat down, ate, and rode a children\'s roller coaster etc. I remember having fun taking pictures with my family.
>> I remember bringing delicious snacks in the car with my parents, spreading out a mat, sitting down to eat, and riding the children\'s roller coaster. I also had fun taking pictures with my family.
The amusement park has been a picnic area for my family for a few years even after my brother was born, and has disappeared as fewer people visit.
>> The amusement park remained a picnic spot for my family for a few years, even after my brother was born, but it eventually closed as fewer people visited.
But it remains a happy memory for my family.
>> CORRECT.
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