What are your hopes before this year ends?

2021-10-20 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

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I have some of my goals for this year. First, I hope I pass my listening and speaking English course to enter seminary before this year ends, after this time, my English improves more. English speaking skills are challenging for me because I feel anxious when I speak. I always thought that I wanted to give up. But if I give up studying English, I can make my future in the USA. Sometimes, It is too stressful for me. I don\'t want to rely on my husband to live in the USA. Even though I don\'t have ample time to study English, I will do it step by step to study English. Second, While studying, I hope I want to keep my health well. During the study of English, I was very exhausted because I got so many homework and tests. I don\'t want to lose my health. Third, I want to make an album for my daughter. I have to organize my daughter\'s pics to make an album but it\'s a big deal because I have almost over five-thousand pics. I\'m not sure how I can finish it, but I will try it. Thanks, Faith!!

강사 첨삭

By faith, you will receive God\'s blessings for you, Jane! Do not be afraid because He is with you! It seems that all of your goals are for His glory so I am sure he will grant them as long as you abide in Him. See you when I see you! Can\'t wait!-Faith-
I have some of my goals for this year. 
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First, I hope I pass my listening and speaking English course to enter seminary before this year ends, after this time, my English improves more. 
>> First, I hope I pass my listening and speaking English courses to enter seminary before this year ends, after this time, my English will improve more. 
English speaking skills are challenging for me because I feel anxious when I speak. 
>> CORRECT
I always thought that I wanted to give up. 
>> CORRECT
OR I always thought of quitting.
But if I give up studying English, I can make my future in the USA. 
>> But if I give up studying English, I can\'t make a better future in the USA. 
Sometimes, It is too stressful for me. 
>> CORRECT
I don\'t want to rely on my husband to live in the USA. 
>> CORRECT
OR I don\'t want to pin my hope on my husband to stay in the USA.
Even though I don\'t have ample time to study English, I will do it step by step to study English.
>> Even though I don\'t have ample time to study English, I will do it step by step.
Second, While studying, I hope I want to keep my health well. 
>> Second, while studying, I hope to keep my health well. 
During the study of English, I was very exhausted because I got so many homework and tests. 
>> During my English study, I was very exhausted because I got a lot of homework and tests. 
I don\'t want to lose my health.
>> CORRECT
OR I want to be in good shape.
Third, I want to make an album for my daughter. 
>> CORRECT
I have to organize my daughter\'s pics to make an album but it\'s a big deal because I have almost over five-thousand pics. 
>> I have to organize my daughter\'s pics to make an album but it\'s a big deal because I have almost over five thousand pics. 
I\'m not sure how I can finish it, but I will try it.
>> CORRECT
Thanks, Faith!!
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