What are your plans for Valentine\'s Day?
학생이 쓴 원문
Valentine\'s Day is also my boyfriend\'s birthday.
I prepared a musical to watch with him on his birthday.
After watching the musical, I tried to have a cake party with chicken and beer.
Third, I saved money for buying his birthday gift. I didn\'t prepare his gift. Because when I ask him what you want to receive, he said nothing. So, after Valentine\'s Day, I have plan to go shopping with him.
However, he couldn\'t watch the musical. Because his grandmother was in an emergency.
And grandmother passed away, so I didn\'t have chance not to spend money that I saved for present. I used money for a condolence money instead of gift.
I\'m so sad and feel sorry about that. But, I\'m sure his mind is more heartbroken than me.
I will prepare more for next his birthday. I think saving money is most important for me. Because I didn\'t give his gift this year. lol
강사 첨삭
Hello Kate!
Thank you for this well-made composition. Please be careful on your trip tomorrow. See you on Friday! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
I prepared a musical to watch with him on his birthday.
I prepared a musical to watch with him on his birthday.
>>I prepared tickets for a musical to watch with him on his birthday.
After watching the musical, I tried to have a cake party with chicken and beer.
After watching the musical, I tried to have a cake party with chicken and beer.
>>After watching the musical, I tried to have a party with cake, chicken and beer.
Third, I saved money for buying his birthday gift. I didn\'t prepare his gift. Because when I ask him what you want to receive, he said nothing. So, after Valentine\'s Day, I have plan to go shopping with him.
Third, I saved money for buying his birthday gift. I didn\'t prepare his gift. Because when I ask him what you want to receive, he said nothing. So, after Valentine\'s Day, I have plan to go shopping with him.
>>Third, I saved money for buying his birthday gift. I didn\'t prepare his gift because when I asked him what he wants to receive, he said nothing. So, after Valentine\'s Day, I have plan to go shopping with him.
However, he couldn\'t watch the musical. Because his grandmother was in an emergency.
However, he couldn\'t watch the musical. Because his grandmother was in an emergency.
>>CORRECT!
And grandmother passed away, so I didn\'t have chance not to spend money that I saved for present. I used money for a condolence money instead of gift.
>>His grandmother passed away, so I didn\'t have chance to spend the money that I saved for his present. I used money for funeral donations instead of a gift.
I\'m so sad and feel sorry about that. But, I\'m sure his mind is more heartbroken than me.
And grandmother passed away, so I didn\'t have chance not to spend money that I saved for present. I used money for a condolence money instead of gift.
>>His grandmother passed away, so I didn\'t have chance to spend the money that I saved for his present. I used money for funeral donations instead of a gift.
I\'m so sad and feel sorry about that. But, I\'m sure his mind is more heartbroken than me.
>>I\'m so sad and feel sorry about that but, I\'m sure he is more heartbroken than me.
I will prepare more for next his birthday. I think saving money is most important for me. Because I didn\'t give his gift this year. lol
I will prepare more for next his birthday. I think saving money is most important for me. Because I didn\'t give his gift this year. lol
>>I will prepare more for his next birthday. I think saving money is the most important for me because I didn\'t give his gift this year.
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