What are your rights as a person that was once violated?
학생이 쓴 원문
There are several rights that person who was violated has.
Firstly, If person who was criminal have done all the punishment for their sins, They can be treated like ordinary people. However, the government conducts monitoring to prevent recidivism.
In addition, If they have been conducted to work in prison, they deserve that finding a job. However, they have to show more effort and sincerity than others.
However, Although they they have a chance to live the same life as others, it is never changed that they were criminal.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for sharing your opinion. :)
>> There are several rights a person has that can be violated.
Firstly, If person who was criminal have done all the punishment for their sins,
>> Firstly, if a person who has a criminal record did something, they should be punished for their sins.
They can be treated like ordinary people.
>> Correct.
However, the government conducts monitoring to prevent recidivism.
In addition, If they have been conducted to work in prison, they deserve that finding a job.
>> Correct.
>> In a addition, if they have been conducting work in prison, they deserve to find a job.
However, they have to show more effort and sincerity than others.
>> Correct.
>> However, although when they have a chance to live the same life as others, it is will never change the fact that they are criminals.
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