what are your short term and long term goals?
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As you know, since I retired in late July, I\'ve been looking for ways to find new work. In the short term, my goal is to prepare and volunteer abroad through KOICA. In the long term, I will seek for my favorite work and live a happy life with my family forever.
2,what are your key skills ?
I have been used to banking for 30 years. In particular, I have the customer marketing ability through 14 years of life as a branch manager. In addition, I was a leader of military officers and a long-time organizational leader. Therefore I have a exceptional leadership. My specialty is that I can communicate business with foreigners in English either.
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>>CORRECT!
In the short term, my goal is to prepare and volunteer abroad through KOICA.
>>CORRECT!
In the long term, I will seek for my favorite work and live a happy life with my family forever.
>>CORRECT! (WOW!)
>>CORRECT! (WOW!)
what are your key skills ?
I have been used to banking for 30 years.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: I have been used to banking work for 30 years.
In particular, I have the customer marketing ability through 14 years of life as a branch manager.
>>In particular, I have developed my customer marketing skills throughout my 14-year career as a branch manager.
In addition, I was a leader of military officers and a long-time organizational leader.
>>CORRECT!
Therefore I have a exceptional leadership.
>>Therefore, I have exceptional leadership skills.
My specialty is that I can communicate business with foreigners in English either.
>>My specialty is that I can communicate business matters with foreigners in English.
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