what are your thought on the four-day work week?
학생이 쓴 원문
Simply, I thought that the four-day work week is good for common company workers.
But It \'s not at all. One day, I read the script on the online-news.
It was about the effects four-day work week on local economy.
According to the article, people who has one more holiday will pay a lot of money
for their leisure in local stores on their holiday.
As a result, It informed that their consumes can make improve local economy.
I think It has diverse advantages in this aspect.
So, I agree with the four-day work week starts.
강사 첨삭
Simply, I thought that the four-day work week is good for common company workers.
>> CORRECT
OR >> I simply thought that the four-day work week is good for regular company workers.
But It \'s not at all. One day, I read the script on the online-news.
>> But that\'s not all. One day, I read an article on a news website.
>> But that\'s not all. One day, I read an article on a news website.
OR >> But it\'s not. One day, I read an online news article.
It was about the effects four-day work week on local economy.
>> It was about the effects of the four-day week on the local economy.
>> It was about the effects of the four-day week on the local economy.
According to the article, people who has one more holiday will pay a lot of money for their leisure in local stores on their holiday.
>> According to the article, people who have one more holiday will pay a lot of money for their leisure in the local stores during their day off.
OR >> According to the article, people who have one more holiday will spend a lot of money for their leisure at the local stores.
As a result, It informed that their consumes can make improve local economy.
>> As a result, the consumers can improve the local economy.
>> As a result, the consumers can improve the local economy.
OR >> As a result, it is said that the consumes can help improve the local economy.
I think It has diverse advantages in this aspect.
>> Given this aspect, I think it has diverse advantages.
>> Given this aspect, I think it has diverse advantages.
OR >> Given this result, I think it has a lot of advantages to offer.
So, I agree with the four-day work week starts.
>> So, I agree with the four-day work week notion/concept.
OR >> Hence, I support the four-day work week implementation.
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