What are your thoughts on field day.
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I think field day is good because children can increase unity with friends.
And playing and exercising with friends is fun.
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What are your thoughts on field day?
I think field day is good because children can increase unity with friends.
>> OR: I believe a field day is a good thing because it gives kids a [이름]nce to learn about unification and working together.
And playing and exercising with friends is fun.
>> OR: Also, spending a day being active with schoolmates and friends is very exciting.
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