What are your thoughts on kids staying on the phone for so long daily?
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I think it is not bad because the phone call is not game, YouTube so long time on call is not bad but I don\'t like staying on the phone so long time because tired.
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What are your thoughts on kids staying on the phone for so long daily?
I think it is not bad because the phone call is not game, YouTube so long time on call is not bad but
I don\'t like staying on the phone so long time because tired.
>> I think it is not bad because talking on the phone is not as bad as gaming or watching YouTube videos for a long time but I don\'t like staying on the phone too long because it\'s tiring.
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