What are your worries in life? Explain your points.
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Though, there have been several worries in my life, the most worries nowadays are my heath and my success in my work. Among these two matters, actually, ‘health’ is the most concerned thing in my life. Because, I can not imagine that I could make success without my health both physically and mentally.
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What are your worries in life? Explain your points.
Though, there have been several worries in my life, the most worries nowadays are my heath and my success in my work.
>>> Though there have been several worries in my life, the things that worry me nowadays are my health and my success in my work.
OR: Though I have a lot of worries in my life, my good health and my success in my job are the top two of my worries.
Among these two matters, actually, ‘health’ is the most concerned thing in my life.
>>> Among these two matters, actually, ‘health’ is the most that concerns me the most.
Because, I can not imagine that I could make success without my health both physically and mentally.
>>> Because I can not imagine a successful life without good health both physically and mentally.
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