What aspects of life in the city would you complain about?
학생이 쓴 원문
A lot of people lives in Seoul about nine million. (Three million people lives in Busan.)
So when i go out, i can meet a lot of people.
Specially, i take the subway in line 9.
Too many many people are in subway.
And i hate place of crowded
So it\'s really inconvenience.
And a lot of friends are living in Busan.
Sometime, I miss them but i can\'t visit Busan.
However, Seoul have a many good points.
I can go every place to take a subway.
and Seoul have a lot of educational facilities or key facilities.
These days, i\'m satisfied of living in Seoul.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Simon! You have good points in your homework. Thank you for sharing them to me. :) Until the next one! See you tomorrow!
~Teacher Sheila
>>A lot of people live in Seoul, about nine million. (Three million people live in Busan.)
So when i go out, i can meet a lot of people.
>>So when I go out, I can meet a lot of people.
Specially, i take the subway in line 9.
>>I especially take the subway in line 9.
Too many many people are in subway.
>>Too many people are in the subway.
OR>>A lot of people are in the subway.
And i hate place of crowded
>>And I hate crowded places.
OR>>And I hate a place that is crowded.
So it\'s really inconvenience.
>>So, it\'s really inconvenient.
And a lot of friends are living in Busan.
>>And a lot of my friends are living in Busan.
Sometime, I miss them but i can\'t visit Busan.
>>Sometimes, I miss them but I can\'t visit them in Busan.
However, Seoul have a many good points.
>>However, Seoul has a lot of good points.
I can go every place to take a subway.
>>I can go to a lot of places using the subway.
and Seoul have a lot of educational facilities or key facilities.
>>and Seoul has a lot of educational facilities or key facilities.
These days, i\'m satisfied of living in Seoul.
>>These days, I\'m satisfied living in Seoul.
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