What benefits are there to countries who accept refugees?

2021-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Thank you for this [이름]nie. Well you do have a point, but let\'s try to be open about this issue and broaden our perspective about it. Here is the link for an article that talks about the benefits of taking in refugees ( https://borgenproject.org/benefits-of-aiding-refugees/ ). They might be too ideal not not realistic, but they also have a point.


Is there any favor public opinion for the refugee taking? 

>>> Is there any favorable public opinion for the refugee taking?

>>> OR: Is there any public opinion that leans towards favoring the refugee taking?  

Several European countries such as Germany and France have been taking refugees for a long time and they have been getting through social problems with the uncontrollable number of those evacuees. 

>>>  OR: Several European countries such as Germany and France have been taking refugees for a long time and they have been going through several social problems with the uncontrollable number of those evacuees.   

EU countries have received a number of refugees from the humanitarian point of view, but they announced that they will not take those refugees indiscreetly any more. 

>>> correct  

It was because they have been through the difficulties with the illegal refugees and destroyed society to deal with it. 

>>> correct   

Instead, they insist that they will support the countries which are situated around Afghanistan to make them take those evacuees.

>>> correct

>>> OR: Instead, they insist that they will support the countries which are situated around Afghanistan if they take those evacuees.  

That’s the phase that the rest countries are confronting. 

>>> That’s the phase that the rest of the countries are confronting.   

And they decided that without any organized readiness, they couldn’t take the huge amounts of refugees. 

>>> correct   

Would it be any benefit for the countries to get from the enormous refugee taking? 

>>>  Would there be any benefit for the countries to get from the enormous refugee taking?  

I’m not sure if there is any respond for the question.

>>> I’m not sure if there is any response to the question.  


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