What can we do to avoid depression?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t know, but in my case, I moved my body constantly and I contiue a positive thinking.
When I was sick 4 years ago, I do not well move body for a month.It took me a while to recover.
I don\'t work, pick up my baby, etc.
Lyed down, I gain weight, look my face was depressed.
It was hard, I walked slowly in the park early in the moning.
I heard good lectures, experience, etc
I spend time in the park.
I contiue a positive thinking.
My body and mental got better.
I think we are trying to changed thinking.
So our body are continue move and spend time in nature.
강사 첨삭
Wow! You are now my role model, Soolyn! You are a brave woman and should be the source of inspiration.-Faith-
I don\'t know, but in my case, I moved my body constantly and I contiue a positive thinking.>> I do not know, but in my case, I move my body constantly and I continue a positive thinking.
When I was sick 4 years ago, I do not well move body for a month.
>> When I was sick four years ago, I could not move my body well for a month.
It took me a while to recover.
>> CORRECT
I don\'t work, pick up my baby, etc.
I don\'t work, pick up my baby, etc.
>> I could not work and pick up my baby.
Lyed down, I gain weight, look my face was depressed.
>> I was just lying down, so I gained weight and my face looked depressed.
It was hard, I walked slowly in the park early in the moning.
Lyed down, I gain weight, look my face was depressed.
>> I was just lying down, so I gained weight and my face looked depressed.
It was hard, I walked slowly in the park early in the moning.
>> It was hard, so I would take a walk slowly in the park early in the morning.
I heard good lectures, experience, etc
I heard good lectures, experience, etc
>> I heard good lectures and people\'s experiences.
I spend time in the park.
I spend time in the park.
>> I spent time in the park.
I contiue a positive thinking.
I contiue a positive thinking.
>> I continued a positive thinking.
My body and mental got better.
My body and mental got better.
>> Because of that, my physical and mental health got getter.
I think we are trying to changed thinking. So our body are continue move and spend time in nature.
I think we are trying to changed thinking. So our body are continue move and spend time in nature.
>> I think we should try to change our way of thinking, so our body can continue to move and spend time in nature.
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