What can we do to improve our relationship with our friends?
학생이 쓴 원문
Well, I think you can pay attention to two main things.
First, you will talk a lot with your friends.
The answer to all conflicts may not be dialogue, but the best way is to resolve them through dialogue.
If we talk to each otehr, I think we can easily resolve the misunderstanding and take a step forward in a good relationship.
I\'m sure you\'ll feel awkward and angry at frist, but I\'m sure you\'ll have less and less time to feel that way in conversation.
And if it\'s not a relationship you don\'t even want to see each other\'s faces, there\'s room for the relationship to improve, so everyone should try.
Second, I will spend a lot of time with my friends.
In Korea, there is a old saying, \'Time is the medicine of everything.\'
It means that over time everything will be understood and things will get better.
So if you spend a lot of time with your friends, you will be able to understand your friends and you will be in a better condition if you have a relationship that understands each other.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
Thank you for your thoughtful essay! You’ve done a wonderful job sharing your ideas on how to improve relationships through communication and time spent together. Your writing shows a clear understanding of the importance of dialogue and patience in friendships.
~ Teacher Gina
Well, I think you can pay attention to two main things.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I believe there are two main things to focus on.First, you will talk a lot with your friends.
>> First, you should talk a lot with your friends.
The answer to all conflicts may not be dialogue, but the best way is to resolve them through dialogue.
>> The answer to all conflicts may not be dialogue, but it is often the best way.
>> Or: Dialogue may not solve every conflict, but it is often the best way to resolve issues.
If we talk to each otehr, I think we can easily resolve the misunderstanding and take a step forward in a good relationship.
>> If we talk to each other, I believe misunderstandings can be resolved, and we can move forward in building a stronger relationship.
I\'m sure you\'ll feel awkward and angry at frist, but I\'m sure you\'ll have less and less time to feel that way in conversation.
>> I\'m sure you\'ll feel awkward and angry at first, but I\'m sure you\'ll have less and less time to feel that way in a conversation.
>> Or: You may feel awkward and angry at first, but over time, those feelings will diminish as you continue to converse.
And if it\'s not a relationship you don\'t even want to see each other\'s faces, there\'s room for the relationship to improve, so everyone should try.
>> As long as it’s not a relationship where you can’t even stand to see each other, there’s room for improvement, so it’s worth trying.
Second, I will spend a lot of time with my friends.
>> Second, I would spend more time with my friends.
In Korea, there is a old saying, \'Time is the medicine of everything.\'
>> In Korea, there is an old saying: \"Time is the medicine for everything.\"
It means that over time everything will be understood and things will get better.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It means that, with time, misunderstandings can be resolved and situations can improve.
So if you spend a lot of time with your friends, you will be able to understand your friends and you will be in a better condition if you have a relationship that understands each other.
>> So if you spend a lot of time with your friends, you will be able to understand them and you will be in a better condition if you have a relationship that understands each other.
>> Or: By spending more time with your friends, you’ll better understand them and build a relationship based on mutual understanding.
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