What can you say about the latest fire alert in Australia?
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to mention about our responsibility to keep our earth healthy. Earlier generations have lived here and handed it over to next generations including our kids. No parents do not want to leave a debt to children. Every parents want to give good things to them. Maintaining forest is just like this.
I knew that the bush fire in Australia caused by the spontaneous ignition and I felt sorry about that disaster. But it was not and the government has investigated what is the root cause.
If the bush fire happened by people’s mistake, I would be very disappointed even more.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Do you know that half billion of animals died during the bush fire?
I am sure that residents, or the world rather, would suffer from its adverse and direct effects to health and economy of the country.
And, you\'re right! I hope my kids would have a change to see live and healthy Koalas in the near future.
Anyway, here are the corrections.
I want to mention about our responsibility to keep our earth healthy.
>> Correct!
>> Correct!
Earlier generations have lived here and handed it over to next generations including our kids.
>> Earlier generations have lived here and handed it over to the next generations including our kids.
No parents do not want to leave a debt to children. Every parents want to give good things to them.
>> No parents want to leave a debt to children. Every parents want to give good things to them.
Maintaining forest is just like this.
>> Maintaining the forest is just like this.
I knew that the bush fire in Australia caused by the spontaneous ignition and I felt sorry about that disaster.
>> Correct!
But it was not and the government has investigated what is the root cause.
>> But it was not, and the government has investigated its root cause.
If the bush fire happened by people’s mistake, I would be very disappointed even more.
>> Correct!
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