What causes some young people to have a negative self-image?

2019-04-15 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Negative self-image results from multiple aspects. It could be caused by education, bully, family environment, social media and pressure, internal hormonal imbalance etc. For the young people, I think specially, the social media and environment are main causes. Since we live in highly connected society, we get touched by media in every second. The young people, at that age, consider that to be admired and qualified by others is very important and surely it\'s important to have a self-confident in a long terme. So they turn into social media to boast about who they are and what they are by comparing with others. This competition turns them down when they are not well demonstrated in the media and in the consequence, they have negative image on them. At that point, the environment like parents, friends, or teachers, have to take a important role which can shows the young that they are more valuable than they think about themselves.

강사 첨삭

Negative self-image results from multiple aspects. 

>>  Correct
 It could be caused by education, bully, family environment, social media and pressure, internal hormonal imbalance etc. 

>> It could be caused by education, bullying, family background, pressure social media, and internal hormonal imbalance etc. 
 For the young people, I think specially, the social media and environment are main causes. 

>> For young people, I think, social media and the environment are the main causes.
 Since we live in highly connected society, we get touched by media in every second. 

>> Since we live in a highly connected society, we are exposed to media every second.
 The young people, at that age, consider that to be admired and qualified by others is very important and surely it\'s important to have a self-confident in a long terme.

>> The young people, at that age, consider that to be admired and qualified by others it is very important and crucial to have a self-confidence.

So they turn into social media to boast about who they are and what they are by comparing with others.

>> So they turn to social media to boast about who and what they are by comparing themselves to others.

This competition turns them down when they are not well demonstrated in the media and in the consequence, they have negative image on them. 

>> This competition turns them down when they are not well demonstrated in the media and in the consequence, they have negative image on themselves. 
 At that point, the environment like parents, friends, or teachers, have to take a important role which can shows the young that they are more valuable than they think about themselves.

>>  At that point, the people around them like parents, friends, or teachers, have to take an important role that can show the young that they are more valuable than they think about themselves.

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