What causes some young people to have a negative self image?

2019-07-03 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Nowadays young people are exposed various medias such as sns, youtube and so on. And sometimes they also want to get much more attention from other people. I think they want to get recognition through these activities which uploading and sharing with an unspecified number of people and they don’t care these activities can be a big problem in our society. So, It can cause to violate other people’s privacy. this is one of the reason that they make their images very badly.

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Nowadays young people are exposed various medias such as sns, youtube and so on.

>>Nowadays, young people are exposed to various medias such as SNS, YouTube and so on.

And sometimes they also want to get much more attention from other people.

>> Correct

I think they want to get recognition through these activities which uploading and sharing with an unspecified number of people and they don’t care these activities can be a big problem in our society.

>> I think they want to get recognition through these activities which are uploading and sharing with an unspecified number of people and they don’t care if these activities can be a big problem in our society.

So, It can cause to violate other people’s privacy. this is one of the reason that they make their images very badly.

>> So, It can cause to violate other people’s privacy. This is one of the reason that they make their images very badly.

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