What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age?

I said that I would like to change my home towns' transportation before in my essay. Actually there is one more thing that I want to change, especially appealing to in my age. It is "Branding". My hometown make up the majority of meat production. However no one know about it because we didn't make any brand about our production. In most town, they have their own local brand about regional specialties. Unfortunately my hometown even try to make their own brand. I believe our hometowns' meat, beef, and chicken is the most delicious and high quality then other city. If we can success to branding of these products, It must be more famous and a lot of people want to buy it, and as a result of this my hometown will able to earn more money These are the reason why I want to make brand of my hometown's production to appeal to young people.

Hello [이름]! ^^ Thank you for telling me what you think would make your hometown more appealing. ^^ Yes, I do remember that you mentioning that your hometown\'s major product is it\'s meat but not a lot of people know about it. I agree that your idea would boost your hometown\'s economy not including tourism. ^^ There aren\'t any major corrections in your essay; just a little rephrasing here and there to help with the eloquence of it so it really is a job well done on your part. ~~~   See you in class!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==     I said that I would like to change my home towns\' transportation before in my essay. Actually there is one more thing that I want to change, especially appealing to in my age. It is \"Branding\". >> In my previous essay, I mentioned that I would like to change my hometown\'s transportation but there is actually one more thing I\'d like to change to make my town more appealing and that is \"branding\". My hometown make up the majority of meat production. However no one know about it because we didn\'t make any brand about our production. >> My hometown is the leader in meat production, however, not a lot of people know about it since we don\'t have our own specific brand.   In most town, they have their own local brand about regional specialties. Unfortunately my hometown even try to make their own brand. >> In most towns, they have their own local brands for their region\'s specialties, unfortunately, my hometown haven\'t attempted to make their own brand. I believe our hometowns\' meat, beef, and chicken is the most delicious and high quality then other city. If we can success to branding of these products, It must be more famous and a lot of people want to buy it, and as a result of this my hometown will able to earn more money>> I believe that our hometown\'s meats like beef and chicken is the most delicious and has the highest quality compare to other cities and if we succeed in branding these products, the town would be famous and a lot of people would want to buy; resulting in a positive increase in the town\'s economy. These are the reason why I want to make brand of my hometown\'s production to appeal to young people. >> These are the reasons why I want to have my hometown\'s products branded to create more appeal to young people.