What changes would you like to make in the Korean economy?
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to reduce the gap between the rich and poor.
In Korea, some people like a president or members of the National Assembly live in luxury.
However, many people live in a hard environment.
They live with a lot of worried about finances.
They can\'t eat enough or live in goon condition.
By reducing this gap between the rich and poor, we can live happily together.
Of course, it is hard for the rich to share their money or food to the poor, but I think they should consider the poor.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Chloe!
Here are the corrections.
I want to reduce the gap between the rich and poor. In Korea, some people like a president or members of the National Assembly live in luxury.
>>I want to reduce the gap between the rich and poor. In Korea, some people like the president or the members of the National Assembly live in luxury.
However, many people live in a hard environment. They live with a lot of worried about finances. They can\'t eat enough or live in goon condition.
>>However, many people live a hard life. They live with a lot of worries about finances. They can\'t eat enough or live in good condition.
By reducing this gap between the rich and poor, we can live happily together. Of course, it is hard for the rich to share their money or food to the poor, but I think they should consider the poor.
>>Correct!
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