What changes would you like to make in the Korean economy?
학생이 쓴 원문
In Korea, media inform that Korean economy is crisis .
Also, people feel that Korean economy is not good state.
I agree this opinion because it is difficult to get a job recently.
However, I think that Korean economy is not as dangerous as we felt.
First, most people will think that Korea is almost developed country. Actually, Korea\'s GDP ranked 12th among OECD countries in 2017. So, it is difficult to grow economy dramatically. Maybe it is natural not to grow dramatically. So, we have to lower our expectation.
Also, it is getting better than the past. For example, the export amount of shipbuilding is increasing.
The Korean economy will be better over time. Therefore, I wish that I get a job by next year.
강사 첨삭
Hi Se [이름]!
I have a question. Why is it difficult to get a job in Korea?
I am interested to know since I am planning to work in Korea in a long term.
Here are the corrections.
In Korea, media inform that Korean economy is crisis . Also, people feel that Korean economy is not good state.
>>In Korea, media informs that Korean economy is having crisis . Also, people feel that Korean economy is not in a good state.
I agree this opinion because it is difficult to get a job recently. However, I think that Korean economy is not as dangerous as we felt.
>>I agree with this opinion because it is difficult to get a job recently. However, I think that Korean economy is not as dangerous as we felt.
First, most people will think that Korea is almost developed country. Actually, Korea\'s GDP ranked 12th among OECD countries in 2017. So, it is difficult to grow economy dramatically. Maybe it is natural not to grow dramatically. So, we have to lower our expectation.
>>First, most people will think that Korea is the most developed country. Actually, Korea\'s GDP ranked 12th among the OECD countries in 2017. So, it is difficult to grow the economy dramatically. Maybe it is natural not to be this way. So, we have to lower our expectations.
Also, it is getting better than the past. For example, the export amount of shipbuilding is increasing.
>>Correct!
The Korean economy will be better over time. Therefore, I wish that I get a job by next year.
>>The Korean economy will be better over time. Therefore, I wish that I get a job by next year.
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