What changes would you like to make to your lifestyle?

2018-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

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As you know, I am a radiation therapist and my wife is radiation technologist. Our working are totally different. My wife's duty always changes every month. They are 9 am-6 pm, 1 pm-21 pm and 6 pm to 9 am. It makes me run a household. I know that my wife has been making an effort a lot for our family, however one thing that I miss is relationship with my colleague and friend. As you can be aware of, I do take care of my children, unless the duty of my wife is day shift. There will be a lot of parties for end of the year and there are somethings I must attend, but I might not attend all the parties because of personal affairs. This make me a little bit sad. It is common that if somebody asked us to go out one day, and I always deny their proposal, people who asked me to go out would not ask me to have dinner because I would reject what they asked. So, I would really change my life pattern as general business man do.

강사 첨삭

This is what everything makes balance, Sir [이름]!

There\'s nothing wrong in attending parties once in a while because apparently, it\'s our sweetest escape from the daunting tasks we have at work and at home. Keep writing your thoughts! Great work!

~Teacher Eunice


As you know, I am a radiation therapist and my wife is radiation technologist.

>>> As you know, I am a radiation therapist and my wife is a radiation technologist.

Our working are totally different.

>>> Our jobs are totally different.  

My wife\'s duty always changes every month.

>>> correct!

>>> OR: My wife is working in shifting schedules.

They are 9 am-6 pm, 1 pm-21 pm and 6 pm to 9 am. 

>>> These are the schedules 9 a.m.-6 p.m., 1 a.m.-2 p.m., and 6 p.m. to 9 a.m.  

It makes me run a household.

>>> It makes me run the household.

I know that my wife has been making an effort a lot for our family, however one thing that I miss is relationship with my colleague and friend.

>>> I know that my wife has been making a lot of effort for our family, however; one thing that I miss about is my relationship with my colleagues and friends.

As you can be aware of, I do take care of my children, unless the duty of my wife is day shift.

>>> As you can be aware of, I do take care of my children, unless the duty of my wife is in the day shift.

There will be a lot of parties for end of the year and there are somethings I must attend, but I might not attend all the parties because of personal affairs.

>>> There will be a lot of year-end parties, and there are some things I must attend, but I might not be able to attend all the parties because of personal affairs.  

This make me a little bit sad.

>>> This makes me a little bit sad.  

It is common that if somebody asked us to go out one day, and I always deny their proposal, people who asked me to go out would not ask me to have dinner because I would reject what they asked. 

>>> It is common for me to be asked out by my friends, but I always reject their invitation, so they end up not inviting me anymore because I would eventually reject their invitation. 

So, I would really change my life pattern as general business man do.

>>> So, I would really change my life pattern as general business men do.

>>> OR: I would also like to boost my social life since I\'m in the corporate world.

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