What changes would you like to make to your lifestyle?
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This is what everything makes balance, Sir [이름]!
There\'s nothing wrong in attending parties once in a while because apparently, it\'s our sweetest escape from the daunting tasks we have at work and at home. Keep writing your thoughts! Great work!
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As you know, I am a radiation therapist and my wife is radiation technologist.
>>> As you know, I am a radiation therapist and my wife is a radiation technologist.
Our working are totally different.
>>> Our jobs are totally different.
My wife\'s duty always changes every month.
>>> correct!
>>> OR: My wife is working in shifting schedules.
They are 9 am-6 pm, 1 pm-21 pm and 6 pm to 9 am.
>>> These are the schedules 9 a.m.-6 p.m., 1 a.m.-2 p.m., and 6 p.m. to 9 a.m.
It makes me run a household.
>>> It makes me run the household.
I know that my wife has been making an effort a lot for our family, however one thing that I miss is relationship with my colleague and friend.
>>> I know that my wife has been making a lot of effort for our family, however; one thing that I miss about is my relationship with my colleagues and friends.
As you can be aware of, I do take care of my children, unless the duty of my wife is day shift.
>>> As you can be aware of, I do take care of my children, unless the duty of my wife is in the day shift.
There will be a lot of parties for end of the year and there are somethings I must attend, but I might not attend all the parties because of personal affairs.
>>> There will be a lot of year-end parties, and there are some things I must attend, but I might not be able to attend all the parties because of personal affairs.
This make me a little bit sad.
>>> This makes me a little bit sad.
It is common that if somebody asked us to go out one day, and I always deny their proposal, people who asked me to go out would not ask me to have dinner because I would reject what they asked.
>>> It is common for me to be asked out by my friends, but I always reject their invitation, so they end up not inviting me anymore because I would eventually reject their invitation.
So, I would really change my life pattern as general business man do.
>>> So, I would really change my life pattern as general business men do.
>>> OR: I would also like to boost my social life since I\'m in the corporate world.
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