What cities inyour coutry would you like to visit?

2023-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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I want to visit Busan, Dezon, Ulleungdo and Dokdo. Busan is I want to look contaners. And Dezon is I want to go dezon Hanwa Eagles park. And also Ulleundo island is I want to fishing. And lastly Dokdo island is I want to take photos with my family. These are I want to visit Busan, Dezon, Ulleundo island and dokdo island.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

I want to visit Busan, Dezon, Ulleungdo and Dokdo.

>> I want to visit Busan, Daejeon, Ulleungdo and Dokdo.

Busan is I want to look contaners.

>> I want to visit Busan because I want to look at the containers.

And Dezon is I want to go dezon Hanwa Eagles park.

>> And in Daejeon, I want to visit Daejeon Hanwa Eagles park.

And also Ulleundo island is I want to fishing.

>> I also want to go fishing in Ulleungdo island.

And lastly Dokdo island is I want to take photos with my family.

>> Lastly, I want to go to Dokdo island because I want to take photos with my family.
These are I want to visit Busan, Dezon, Ulleundo island and dokdo island.

>> These are the places I want to visit: Busan, Daejeon, Ulleungdo island and Dokdo island.

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