What comes to mind when you hear the phrase \"domestic violence\"? In some countries, domestic viole
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Several news recently related to abusing children comes to my mind. There are many types of domestic violence like physical violence, emotional violence and neglect. All types of domestic violence should be prohibited and everybody should have awareness about that. Thankfully, these days many people have consciousness about domestic violence and abusing children. But I think we still have miles to go before everybody has exactly right awareness that all types of domestic violence shouldn\'t be happend. Therefore, Every goverment should recognize the seriousness about domestic violence and show their movement to change people\'s awareness and establish a law.
I can\'t really understand why domestic violence isn\'t a crime. Every child has the right to live safely and their first place to live is their home. I hope the world where every child live happy without any violence and bad things.
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Several news recently related to abusing children comes to my mind.
>> Some news that was recently related to child abuse comes to my mind.
There are many types of domestic violence like physical violence, emotional violence and neglect.
>> There are many types of domestic violence like physical violence, emotional violence, and neglect.
All types of domestic violence should be prohibited and everybody should have awareness about that.
>> All types of domestic violence should be prohibited and everybody should have awareness of that.
Thankfully, these days many people have consciousness about domestic violence and abusing children.
>> Thankfully, these days many people have consciousness about domestic violence and child abuse.
But I think we still have miles to go before everybody has exactly right awareness that all types of domestic violence shouldn\'t be happened.
>> But I think we still have miles to go before everybody has exactly the right awareness that all types of domestic violence shouldn\'t happen.
Therefore, Every goverment should recognize the seriousness about domestic violence and show their movement to change people\'s awareness and establish a law.
>> Therefore, every government should recognize the seriousness of domestic violence and show their movement to change people\'s awareness and establish laws about it.
I can\'t really understand why domestic violence isn\'t a crime.
>> CORRECT!
OR>> I can\'t really understand why domestic violence isn\'t a crime yet.
Every child has the right to live safely and their first place to live is their home.
>> Every child has the right to live safely and the first place to feel it is their home.
I hope the world where every child live happy without any violence and bad things.
>> I hope the world would be a place where every child lives happily without any violence and bad things.
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