What conflicts exist in your life?
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Actually, I am thing a lot of time my internal conflicts.
>> Actually, I am now thinking about my internal conflicts.
Maybe all people have same things.
>> Maybe all people feel the same way.
The simple example is money or time.
>> correct!
I need to money, so I have to work many hours.
>> I need money so I have to work for many hours.
but, when I work many hours I exhausted.
>> But when I work for a long time, I get exhausted.
So recently, it has new word that is \"Work and life Balance\"
>> Recently, there\'s a new saying which is \"Work and Life balance\".
I Think so too, that is very important.
>> correct!
I also try to Life balance.
>> I also try to balance life.
Money is very important but, my life is also precious.
>> correct!
I am living in Australia.
>> correct!
This country is very perfect life balance.
>> Life in this country is perfectly balanced.
The parents are not too work hard.
>> Parents don\'t work too hard.
They are thinking that spend time with family is quite important.
>> correct!
or:
>> They think that spending time with their family is very important.
Thank you.
>> correct!
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