What conflicts exist in your life?

2018-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

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Q: What conflicts exist in your life? Actually, I am thing a lot of time my internal conflicts. Maybe all people have same things. The simple example is money or time. I need to money, so I have to work many hours. but, when I work many hours I exhausted. So recently, it has new word that is "Work and life Balance" I Think so too, that is very important. I also try to Life balance. Money is very important but, my life is also precious. I am living in Australia. This country is very perfect life balance. The parents are not too work hard. They are thinking that spend time with family is quite important. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

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Actually, I am thing a lot of time my internal conflicts.
>> Actually, I am now thinking about my internal conflicts.
Maybe all people have same things.
>> Maybe all people feel the same way.
The simple example is money or time.
>> correct!
I need to money, so I have to work many hours.

>> I need money so I have to work for many hours.
 but, when I work many hours I exhausted.
>> But when I work for a long time, I get exhausted.
So recently, it has new word that is \"Work and life Balance\"
>> Recently, there\'s a new saying which is \"Work and Life balance\".
 I Think so too, that is very important.

>> correct!
 I also try to Life balance.
>> I also try to balance life.
Money is very important but, my life is also precious.
>> correct!

 I am living in Australia.
>> correct!

This country is very perfect life balance.
>> Life in this country is perfectly balanced.
The parents are not too work hard.

>> Parents don\'t work too hard.
 They are thinking that spend time with family is quite important.
>> correct!

or:

>> They think that spending time with their family is very important.
 Thank you.

>> correct!

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