What considerations do you have when you buy a mobile phone?
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1. First of all, I consider the designs of a mobile phone such as a shape, a line, a color, a material, a size and a characteristc mood of it.
2. And I think over that whether I use it for a long time or not, even though trends are moving fast.
3. Secondly, I consider whether its functions are used at easy or not.
3. On third, I consider not only the aspect of a price for a mobile phone is reasonable but also whether I am able to pay for it or not.
4. Those are my basic considerations when I select a mobile phone.
5. Hopely I dream about living without a mobile phone some day.
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Hi there [이름] [이름]!^^
I do think that you considerations are practical and reasonable!^^
I wish that everybody would think of the same thing when buying phones not just
because of trend or brands!^^
Take care!^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you today:
1. First of all, I consider the designs of a mobile phone such as a shape, a line, a color, a material, a size and a characteristc mood of it.>> First of all, I consider the designs of a mobile phone such as the shape, the line, the color, the material, the size and the characteristic or mood of it.2. And I think over that whether I use it for a long time or not, even though trends are moving fast. >> And I think it over if whether I will use it for a long time or not, even though trends are moving fast. 3. Secondly, I consider whether its functions are used at easy or not.>> Secondly, I will consider whether it\'s functions are easy to use or not.3. On third, I consider not only the aspect of a price for a mobile phone is reasonable but also whether I am able to pay for it or not. >> On third, I will consider not only the aspect of the price for a mobile phone if it is reasonable but also whether I am able to pay for it or not. OR> I will consider the affordability.4. Those are my basic considerations when I select a mobile phone.>> CORRECT
OR> These are the things that I consider when I get a mobile phone.5. Hopely I dream about living without a mobile phone some day.
>> I am hoping that someday I can live wothout a mobile phone.
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