What could be some of the reasons why people don\'t want to get married?
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I think there are a lot of advantages to get married. Nevertheless, nowadays many people don’t get married. Around me, some of my friends don’t want to get married too. There are some reasons for this.
Because they want to enjoy their free life. They can enjoy their life well without marriage by hanging out with new faces freely.
Also they don’t want to get their babies. Because, as you know, it not only costs a lot to raise children but also needs sense of responsible a lot.
Finally they are workaholics. So they don’t have enough free time to spend their family.
강사 첨삭
Hi Elena!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleI think there are a lot of advantages to get married.
>> CORRECT!
Nevertheless, nowadays many people don’t get married.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Nowadays, there are people who don\'t want to get married.
Around me, some of my friends don’t want to get married too.
>> CORRECT!
There are some reasons for this.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are different reasons for this.
Because they want to enjoy their free life. >> That\'s because they want to enjoy their life freely.
They can enjoy their life well without marriage by hanging out with new faces freely.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Unmarried people enjoy their lives by meeting new faces, and hanging out with them.
Also they don’t want to get their babies.
>> Also, they don’t want to have their own babies.
Because, as you know, it not only costs a lot to raise children but also needs sense of responsible a lot.
>> Because, as you know, it not only costs a lot to raise children but also needs a very big sense of responsibility.
Finally they are workaholics.
Finally they are workaholics.
>> Lastly, they are workaholics.
So they don’t have enough free time to spend their family.
>> They don\'t have enough time to spend with their family.
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