“What countries would you like to visit? why?”.
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Hello Mo!
Thank you for doing your homework. :)
I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.
You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^
Xoxo,
T. Christina ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
oh, today’s topic is too hard for me to answer because I want to visit many countries!.
>> Oh, today’s topic is too hard for me to answer because I want to visit many countries!
but, if I choice just one country to visit. I’ll choice ‘Germany’
>> But if I have to choose just one, I would choose Germany.
that is because, when I was young ,at least 20-23 year-old, in my home, I saw “Inglourious Basterds”
>> That is because when I was young, when I was about 20-23 years old, I saw “Inglourious Basterds”.
that movie was released in 2009. that moivie’s actors were ‘Brad Pitt’, ‘Christoph Waltz’, ‘Michael Fassbender’.
>> That movie was released in 2009 and the actors that were in it was Brad Pitt, Christoph Waltz, and Michael Fassbender.
I really loved them (I am also loving them, too !.zZ)
>> I really loved them and until now I still love them.
one actor of them, when I heard Christoph Waltz’s german pronunciation, accent or voice, I thought that German pronunciation was very unique, cool and charming,
>> When I heard one of the actors, Christoph Waltz, speak with a german accent, I thought that the German accent was very unique, cool and charming.
from the moments I saw that movie until now, I’m always admiring ‘Germany’.
>> From that moment that I saw that movie, I have admired Germany.
it may be very ridiculous reasons, but just one thing like ‘accent’ made me want go germany
>>It may be a very ridiculous reason, but one thing\'s for sure, the German accent made me want to go to Germany.
that is why I want to visit Germany.
>> That is why I want to visit Germany.
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