“What countries would you like to visit? why?”.

2019-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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“What countries would you like to visit? why?”. oh, today’s topic is too hard for me to answer because I want to visit many countries!. but, if I choice just one country to visit. I’ll choice ‘Germany’ that is because, when I was young ,at least 20-23 year-old, in my home, I saw “Inglourious Basterds” that movie was released in 2009. that moivie’s actors were ‘Brad Pitt’, ‘Christoph Waltz’, ‘Michael Fassbender’. I really loved them (I am also loving them, too !.zZ) one actor of them, when I heard Christoph Waltz’s german pronunciation, accent or voice, I thought that German pronunciation was very unique, cool and charming, from the moments I saw that movie until now, I’m always admiring ‘Germany’. it may be very ridiculous reasons, but just one thing like ‘accent’ made me want go germany that is why I want to visit Germany.

강사 첨삭

Hello Mo!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

oh, today’s topic is too hard for me to answer because I want to visit many countries!.

>> Oh, today’s topic is too hard for me to answer because I want to visit many countries!

but, if I choice just one country to visit. I’ll choice ‘Germany’

>> But if I have to choose just one, I would choose Germany.
that is because, when I was young ,at least 20-23 year-old, in my home, I saw “Inglourious Basterds” 

>> That is because when I was young, when I was about 20-23 years old, I saw “Inglourious Basterds”.
that movie was released in 2009. that moivie’s actors were ‘Brad Pitt’, ‘Christoph Waltz’, ‘Michael Fassbender’.

>> That movie was released in 2009 and the actors that were in it was Brad Pitt, Christoph Waltz, and Michael Fassbender.
I really loved them (I am also loving them, too !.zZ)

>> I really loved them and until now I still love them.
one actor of them, when I heard Christoph Waltz’s german pronunciation, accent or voice, I thought that German pronunciation was very unique, cool and charming,

>> When I heard one of the actors, Christoph Waltz, speak with a german accent, I thought that the German accent was very unique, cool and charming.
from the moments I saw that movie until now, I’m always admiring ‘Germany’.

>> From that moment that I saw that movie, I have admired Germany.
it may be very ridiculous reasons, but just one thing like ‘accent’ made me want go germany
>>It may be a very ridiculous reason, but one thing\'s for sure, the German accent made me want to go to Germany.

that is why I want to visit Germany.

>> That is why I want to visit Germany.


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