What country do you consider the most dangerous in the world and why?

2016-07-26 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Each country has a regulation that can ban its citizens from traveling to a certain country. The Korean Foreign Ministry hosts a meeting of the Passport Policy Commission regularly. At the meeting of July, the Commission deliberated on whether to extend the travel bans to Iraq, Syria, Yemen, Libya, Somalia, Afghanistan and parts of the Philippines. In the meeting, the Commission, predicting the instability, poor public security and terrorism risks to continue for a considerable period of time in the six countries and parts of the Philippines, decided to extend the travel bans to them for six months until January 31, 2017. The participants took note of the importance of travel bans to risky regions amid the growing terrorism threats overseas, as can be seen from the series of terrorist attacks by armed extremist groups over the past months. They shared the view that it is important to take stronger measures to protect the overseas Koreans. Our company also has a similiar policy.

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Great composition, Sir [이름]! Happy Tuesday!How are you doing today?Did you have enough sleep last night? I hope you did. Thank you so much for sharing your opinions about the topic. I think safety is the most important thing these days. Hope you are having a great day. See you. Teacher Nina   Each country has a regulation that can ban its citizens from traveling to a certain country. >> correct The Korean Foreign Ministry hosts a meeting of the Passport Policy Commission regularly. >> correct At the meeting of July, the Commission deliberated on whether to extend the travel bans to Iraq, Syria, Yemen, Libya, Somalia, Afghanistan and parts of the Philippines. >> correct In the meeting, the Commission, predicting the instability, poor public security and terrorism risks to continue for a considerable period of time in the six countries and parts of the Philippines, decided to extend the travel bans to them for six months until January 31, 2017. >> correct The participants took note of the importance of travel bans to risky regions amid the growing terrorism threats overseas, as can be seen from the series of terrorist attacks by armed extremist groups over the past months. >> correct They shared the view that it is important to take stronger measures to protect the overseas Koreans. >> correct Our company also has a similiar policy >> correct

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