What country do you want to visit and why?

2021-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I want to visit England because I love England movie and drama such as Harry Potter and Sherlock Holmes. If I visit the country, I want to go to movie and drama set. The most reason why I want to go England is that I hope to go to college major in accounting and finance. England is famous for accounting and finance. Therefore, I\'m going to be an international accountant working in UK.

강사 첨삭

Hi Yeong! ^^

That\'s actually a good choice. Europe is known for many great sceneries. The reasons for traveling to Europe are endless. As if its history, culture and natural beauty are not enough to draw you; the cuisine, the locals and the myriad of sights and wonders to see would be more than enough to suffice many visitors.

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I want to visit England because I love England movie and drama such as Harry Potter and Sherlock Holmes.

>> I want to visit England because I love the movies and dramas from that country such Harry Potter and Sherlock Holmes.

If I visit the country, I want to go to movie and drama set.

>> If I visit the country, I want to go to a movie and drama set.

The most reason why I want to go England is that I hope to go to college major in accounting and finance.

>> The main reason why I want to go there is because I hope to study accountancy and financing in their colleges.

England is famous for accounting and finance.

>> CORRECT

Therefore, I\'m going to be an international accountant working in UK.
>> CORRECT

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