What critical feedback do you most often receive?

2022-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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In any situation, I can take criticism as a growth opportunity and not make weakness an ongoing issue. At university, I worked at an Italian restaurant where I sometimes got criticized for being shy. One of the essential duties was to recommend a menu to guests to increase revenue, but I could not even find a way to start a communication. At that time, I decided to develop my strategy. At first, I started with casual conversation and built a rapport with customers. After becoming comfortable with the customers, I made some recommendations and easily navigated a moment when I could proceed with some sales talks. Now, I can easily promote service or product with the customers I meet for the first time. I increased revenue by 50% through various project sales proposals and cold calls in my current job. I genuinely believe “practices make perfect,” and I could have the courage to start from constructive feedback from my manager.

강사 첨삭

Very well said. Thank you for this Aciel. Yes, practice makes perfect indeed.

In any situation, I can take criticism as a growth opportunity and not make weakness an ongoing issue. 
>>> OR: In any situation, I can take criticism as an opportunity for growth and not make an ongoing issue a weakness.   
At university, I worked at an Italian restaurant where I sometimes got criticized for being shy. 
>>> ORDuring university days, I worked at an Italian restaurant where I sometimes got criticized for being shy.   
One of the essential duties was to recommend a menu to guests to increase revenue, but I could not even find a way to start a communication. 
>>>  correct 
At that time, I decided to develop my strategy. 
>>>  correct 
At first, I started with casual conversation and built a rapport with customers. 
>>>  correct   
After becoming comfortable with the customers, I made some recommendations and easily navigated a moment when I could proceed with some sales talks. 
>>>  correct   
Now, I can easily promote service or product with the customers I meet for the first time. 
>>>  correct 
I increased revenue by 50% through various project sales proposals and cold calls in my current job. 
>>>  correct 
I genuinely believe “practices make perfect,” and I could have the courage to start from constructive feedback from my manager.
>>>  correct 

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